Greetings, fellow friends of this wonderful franchise.
I wrote a nearly fifty pages long sequel to Let the Right One in, the swedish movie. I also read the book and watched the american remake, but the original movie touched me the most. There are more infos about that in the preface of the actual story.
Yes, i know the author himself made a sequel, which I learned when I started writing this. So, I tried to lightly harmonize my story with the facts I had from "Let the old dreams die" without reading it.
Writing this story was therapy for me, as I was obsessed with the story after seeing the swedish movie. I hope it can give you something.
One last thing: The translation is largely automated, but I read through it completely and made a lot of corrections. I hope the english is bearable, I for my part as german think it isnt too bad, but if you have grips with some parts, please let me know.
Any kind of feedback would be deeply appreciated. Thank you.
Let Us In:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FGP ... tixQM/edit
There is also gonna be a complete german and english reading by me for youtube, but thats still gonna at least take weeks with this length.
Thanks for your time.
I wrote a (long) short story-sequel for Let The Righe One In
Re: I wrote a (long) short story-sequel for Let The Righe One In
OH AM I GOING TO ENJOY THIS
Buut I gotta save it for later. You'll know when I've read it, I always have something to say
Buut I gotta save it for later. You'll know when I've read it, I always have something to say
Bulleri bulleri buck, hur många horn står upp
Re: I wrote a (long) short story-sequel for Let The Righe One In
Okay I read it, it's 3 o'clock at night. I regret nothing.
There were one spelling error, and like two spelling mistakes, or like, the wrong way to say something, but that's fiine, you should've seen my stuff way back when.
I quite liked it, romantic of course. An enternity of love sort of blend together, writing wise. Of course we love the story of how they met, but I understand sort of by reading this: Why JAL struggled to write a prologue. Because perfect eternal happiness all though very nice and cute and romantic, is not as interesting. BUT I, like you; wants them to have a perfect forever after. So then, have the blandness of eternety be damned, it was lovely and cute and wonderful. I really liked it a lot, and good job!!
'Trige out
There were one spelling error, and like two spelling mistakes, or like, the wrong way to say something, but that's fiine, you should've seen my stuff way back when.
I quite liked it, romantic of course. An enternity of love sort of blend together, writing wise. Of course we love the story of how they met, but I understand sort of by reading this: Why JAL struggled to write a prologue. Because perfect eternal happiness all though very nice and cute and romantic, is not as interesting. BUT I, like you; wants them to have a perfect forever after. So then, have the blandness of eternety be damned, it was lovely and cute and wonderful. I really liked it a lot, and good job!!
'Trige out
Bulleri bulleri buck, hur många horn står upp
Re: I wrote a (long) short story-sequel for Let The Righe One In
I really appreciate the time you took to read it all and write this post.
I agree, sometimes less is more, thats one of the reasons I prefer the movie over the book, I feel the book goes too deeply in Eli's background, for example. And so I think the best thing the author could do with the sequel is really keeping it subtle so people can make up their own thoughts. Which I did, and yes, it wasnt subtle nor really authentic in the end scene, but as I wrote, I wanted them to be happy together.
Thanks for your thoughts!
I agree, sometimes less is more, thats one of the reasons I prefer the movie over the book, I feel the book goes too deeply in Eli's background, for example. And so I think the best thing the author could do with the sequel is really keeping it subtle so people can make up their own thoughts. Which I did, and yes, it wasnt subtle nor really authentic in the end scene, but as I wrote, I wanted them to be happy together.
Thanks for your thoughts!
Re: I wrote a (long) short story-sequel for Let The Righe One In
Welcome, Yoraiko! There is a dedicated subforum for fan fiction in case you haven't checked it out already.
I quite like this story. I enjoyed the matter-of-fact writing style, and the sequence of events and the characters' thoughts feel well thought-out. It's also well-paced, so it feels like a shorter read than the page number might suggest at first (which is a good thing). Other than 2-3 typos I noticed, the English flows well and I couldn't really tell that it's not your first language. Not sure how I feel about the backstory you gave to your version of Håkan, but it and Yia's thoughts about it succeed in conveying a lot of emotion—the "I hope you don't hate me" part is probably my favorite part of the story.
I didn't like the Barcelona section much. I think it drags on a little and becomes too sentimental, but that's a matter of taste. I also thought the part about them pretending to look like teenagers was a little strange and unnecessary.
Lastly, this is a minor nitpick, but this bit isn't particularly accurate to Sweden, I think:
Re: the novel, I can agree with you on the level of detail about the infection and Eli's backstory. I felt those were among the weaker parts of the novel when I first read it, but these days I don't mind them. Other than that, to me, the teeming, many-faceted, dirty and realistic style of the book is one of its main strengths and a key part of its identity, though I can definitely understand preferring the film's fairy-tale tone (which is also great). I do highly recommend reading "Let the Old Dreams Die" (IMO it's JAL's best work, and it's closer in tone to the film), and to a lesser extent "What Kept You So Long?", the loosely-connected sequel to the sequel.
If you write more fan fiction in the future, I'd be interested in reading it!
I quite like this story. I enjoyed the matter-of-fact writing style, and the sequence of events and the characters' thoughts feel well thought-out. It's also well-paced, so it feels like a shorter read than the page number might suggest at first (which is a good thing). Other than 2-3 typos I noticed, the English flows well and I couldn't really tell that it's not your first language. Not sure how I feel about the backstory you gave to your version of Håkan, but it and Yia's thoughts about it succeed in conveying a lot of emotion—the "I hope you don't hate me" part is probably my favorite part of the story.
I didn't like the Barcelona section much. I think it drags on a little and becomes too sentimental, but that's a matter of taste. I also thought the part about them pretending to look like teenagers was a little strange and unnecessary.
Lastly, this is a minor nitpick, but this bit isn't particularly accurate to Sweden, I think:
But I guess since it's not explicitly mentioned, they don't necessarily have to be from Sweden in your telling.[...] especially because where I came from didn't really have a warm summer.
Re: the novel, I can agree with you on the level of detail about the infection and Eli's backstory. I felt those were among the weaker parts of the novel when I first read it, but these days I don't mind them. Other than that, to me, the teeming, many-faceted, dirty and realistic style of the book is one of its main strengths and a key part of its identity, though I can definitely understand preferring the film's fairy-tale tone (which is also great). I do highly recommend reading "Let the Old Dreams Die" (IMO it's JAL's best work, and it's closer in tone to the film), and to a lesser extent "What Kept You So Long?", the loosely-connected sequel to the sequel.
If you write more fan fiction in the future, I'd be interested in reading it!
De höll om varandra i tystnad. Oskar blundade och visste: detta var det största. Ljuset från lyktan i portvalvet trängde svagt in genom hans slutna ögonlock, la en hinna av rött för hans ögon. Det största.
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Re: I wrote a (long) short story-sequel for Let The Righe One In
That sounds like a fascinating project! Writing a sequel to "Let the Right One In" is a big undertaking, especially with such a beloved source material. It's great to hear that the process has been therapeutic for you.