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Hope you guys like it. I'm gonna start the second part probably tomorrow. If you guys like it that is!
So let me know what you think. Honest opinions. How can I make my writing any better if I don't know whats good and whats not?
Life's Memories
Life's Memories
Death changes everything, sweeps everything away. Even mistakes.
Re: Life's Memories
This is the end of a realistic outcome, i.e. one where Oskar and Eli part. And I think this is the way Oskar would remember Eli. Nice!
But from the beginning Eli was just Eli. Nothing. Anything. And he is still a mystery to me. John Ajvide Lindqvist
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Re: Life's Memories
Touching, moving even...you got a few sniffles there, damn yer eyes; that's no place for our Oskar to end up.
Re: Life's Memories
Keep going! You're doing great. It's a very moving piece. 
We never stop reading, although every book comes to an end, just as we never stop living, although death is certain. (Roberto Bolaño)
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Glad to see people are liking it! I got the second part in the pot to boil right now. Should be submitting it tonight or tomorrow hopefully.Death changes everything, sweeps everything away. Even mistakes.
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I almost cry my self! Good job Very very good job!
Good job Very very good job!Bulleri bulleri buck, hur många horn står upp
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Re: Life's Memories
Holy CRAP, Nicro, you can write some [deleted] nice FICTION!
I like that you don't try to detail what happened after the train right out of Blackeberg, and I like that you don't detail why the kids separated (which is commonly seen as one of the most likely outcomes of the story). They were together, then they weren't, and Oskar got on with life.
Your Oskar never forgot. Alzheimer's is the worst kind of thief. Your Oskar never stopped loving Eli.
I can't wait to see what you come up with next.
Edit: 5 Novembre 2011, replaced a "bad word" with [deleted] to comply with renewed restrictions on language.
I like that you don't try to detail what happened after the train right out of Blackeberg, and I like that you don't detail why the kids separated (which is commonly seen as one of the most likely outcomes of the story). They were together, then they weren't, and Oskar got on with life.
Your Oskar never forgot. Alzheimer's is the worst kind of thief. Your Oskar never stopped loving Eli.
I can't wait to see what you come up with next.
Edit: 5 Novembre 2011, replaced a "bad word" with [deleted] to comply with renewed restrictions on language.
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Fais tomber les barrières entre nous qui sommes tous des frères
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This wonderfully completes what Gasan started in his Love's Epitaph, where life after parting from Oskar is seen from Eli's POV. From now on I regard these two an unit *snif*.
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For the heart life is simple. It beats as long as it can.
- Karl Ove Knausgård
- Karl Ove Knausgård
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Great stuff. 
I was thinking.... If LTROI and been written slightly differently, this could have served as the opening scene, and the story unfolded as memories of this old man.
I was thinking.... If LTROI and been written slightly differently, this could have served as the opening scene, and the story unfolded as memories of this old man.
- that would probably kill him, but what a way to go!Why can’t he see her just one more time?