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Be Me A Little
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moonvibe34
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Be Me A Little
ofcourse i think about Oskar and Eli constantly and lately i've been thinking about Eli's life before Oskar and her state of despair.these words are some of those thoughts. fear not it doesn't rhyme feedback always welcome.
http://let-the-right-one-in.com/fancont ... -me-little
feedback always welcome.http://let-the-right-one-in.com/fancont ... -me-little
"But dreams come through stone walls, light up dark rooms, or darken light ones, and their persons make their exits and their entrances as they please, and laugh at locksmiths."
Carmilla by Joseph Sheridan Le Fanu
Carmilla by Joseph Sheridan Le Fanu
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DMt.
Re: Be Me A Little
Go on, you cruel person, make me cry. It's good for me.
Oh, and rhyme, like the rest of the rational intellect, is an excellent servant, but a very poor master.
Oh, and rhyme, like the rest of the rational intellect, is an excellent servant, but a very poor master.
Re: Be Me A Little
I wish I'd knew, why I love your poemsmoonvibe34 wrote:ofcourse i think about Oskar and Eli constantly and lately i've been thinking about Eli's life before Oskar and her state of despair.these words are some of those thoughts. fear not it doesn't rhyme
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Phillip J. Fry: "I hate my life, I hate my life, I hate my life."
"It is the nature of men to create monsters, and it is the nature of monsters to destroy their makers."
"It is the nature of men to create monsters, and it is the nature of monsters to destroy their makers."
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I guess that sounded a lot better in your head.HonzaP wrote:I wish I'd knew, why I love your poemsmoonvibe34 wrote:ofcourse i think about Oskar and Eli constantly and lately i've been thinking about Eli's life before Oskar and her state of despair.these words are some of those thoughts. fear not it doesn't rhyme
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Re: Be Me A Little
Well done! I especially like these lines.
----------In the darkness of night I dwell as a shadow of emptiness and yearning.
My feelings are sealed away by survival's demand, will anyone ever find them?
The first quote could almost apply to any one of us to a lesser degree.Is redemption only for those who are not abhorred?
We never stop reading, although every book comes to an end, just as we never stop living, although death is certain. (Roberto Bolaño)
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when I read it now it sounds wierd and negativeMr.Sample wrote:I guess that sounded a lot better in your head.HonzaP wrote:I wish I'd knew, why I love your poemsmoonvibe34 wrote:ofcourse i think about Oskar and Eli constantly and lately i've been thinking about Eli's life before Oskar and her state of despair.these words are some of those thoughts. fear not it doesn't rhyme
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but I mean it in a good way of course (damn english )Phillip J. Fry: "I hate my life, I hate my life, I hate my life."
"It is the nature of men to create monsters, and it is the nature of monsters to destroy their makers."
"It is the nature of men to create monsters, and it is the nature of monsters to destroy their makers."
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The more fan fiction I read the more I wonder if some have not missed their true calling in life. 
One example of democracy in action is 5 wolves and 1 sheep voting on what to have for lunch.--Anonymous
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moonvibe34
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thanks everyone! i appreciate your kind words and the time you took to read my words. i never know if anything i write is worth submitting so to have the approval of my fellow infected means a lot. 
"But dreams come through stone walls, light up dark rooms, or darken light ones, and their persons make their exits and their entrances as they please, and laugh at locksmiths."
Carmilla by Joseph Sheridan Le Fanu
Carmilla by Joseph Sheridan Le Fanu
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DMt.
A Mutant Limerick for Moonvibe
The open heart of Moonvibe's art!
It leaves me all a-flutter;
Although I am a foolish man,
I can tell talk from mutter.
Sometimes, free verse is even worse than doggerel with rhyme;
The empty words revolve like turds in the primordial slime;
But Moony hath the shining path,
His Muse is rich as butter.
It leaves me all a-flutter;
Although I am a foolish man,
I can tell talk from mutter.
Sometimes, free verse is even worse than doggerel with rhyme;
The empty words revolve like turds in the primordial slime;
But Moony hath the shining path,
His Muse is rich as butter.
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moonvibe34
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Re: A Mutant Limerick for Moonvibe
DMt. wrote:The open heart of Moonvibe's art!
It leaves me all a-flutter;
Although I am a foolish man,
I can tell talk from mutter.
Sometimes, free verse is even worse than doggerel with rhyme;
The empty words revolve like turds in the primordial slime;
But Moony hath the shining path,
His Muse is rich as butter.
wow! thanks so much for that DMt. you just made my day.
"But dreams come through stone walls, light up dark rooms, or darken light ones, and their persons make their exits and their entrances as they please, and laugh at locksmiths."
Carmilla by Joseph Sheridan Le Fanu
Carmilla by Joseph Sheridan Le Fanu